Relate the A-bike from Sinclair to the Tin Bicycle.--Demotech, design 13:23, 4 June 2007 (PDT)
The article nowhere mentions the "tin" in the title.
The article uses "third world," "developing countries," "poor countries," and "poor nations." Should we use one term for all?
Para 4 of the Introduction mentions a design presented here, but the article presents design criteria not an actual design. Are further changes needed?
Under the Re-integration heading, the intention of the paragraph is unclear to me. Destroying material and immaterial demands seems confusing and far-fetched. The system of labor-life is not familiar. Rewrite for clarity when clarity is achieved?
TEJJ CYCLE[edit source]
I HAVE DEVELOPED NEW DRIVING MECHANISM FOR BICYCLE/RICKSHAW HAVING FOLLOWING ADVANTAGES OVER CONVENTIONAL SYSTEM.
I AM READY TO SELL THE INVENTION ALONG WITH PATENT RIGHTS / COMMERCIAL DEVELOPMENT & SELLING RIGHTS ON MUTUALLY AGREED TERMS & CONDITIONS.
IN CASE YOUR COMPANY IS INTERESTED, PL. CONTACT ME. MY MOBILE NO. IS +919424140739.
ADVANTAGES OF TEJJ CYCLE
BY- R. P. NAIK
1. Both legs can drive simultaneously: Due to independent nature of driving both of the legs can be utilised for driving simultaneously whenever required. This will help in dead start or accelerating with high load at step gradients or rough tar rain etc.
2. Continuous driving torque: The driving force on the rear wheel (s) will be a continuous one. As soon as a leg finishes its driving stroke the other leg will start its driving stroke and hence virtually there will be no time of zero torque.
3. More force than driver’s weight can be applied without fatigue: The backrest provided will give support to driver in such a way that by utilizing reaction from backrest, the driver can put on force more than his own weight whenever required.
4. No stress in portion above the waist: Due to same backrest, there will be no stress developed above the waist and back pen and hand tension will be eliminated.
5. More angle turned by thighs & knees ensure more force available when required: Due to position of seat and paddle, the angle turned through by thigh and knee for any stroke of driving will be more than corresponding angle in case of ordinary cycle (rickshaw) hence there will be more work done available per driving stroke of the paddle.
6. Crippled persons can use their able leg: The same system of driving can be utilised for handicapped person’s tricycles. In these, the handicapped person can use his able leg along with his hand for driving the tricycle. If the amputation of a leg is below the knee; than he can use even his stump as well as his able leg for driving with the help of suitable padding and paddle modification.
7. Easy adaptability for existing manufacturers: Once this system proves its utility and is accepted for increased speed /load carrying capacity of rickshaw, the existing cycles or rickshaw manufactures can easily convert to this design without altering many of their facilities.
8. Gear arrangements: Suitable gear arrangements will enhance speed / load carrying capabilities tremendously.
I AM READY TO SELL THE INVENTION ALONG WITH PATENT RIGHTS / COMMERCIAL DEVELOPMENT & SELLING RIGHTS ON MUTUALLY AGREED TERMS & CONDITIONS.
IN CASE YOUR COMPANY IS INTERESTED, PL. CONTACT ME.
FOR GRAPHICAL REPRESENTATION OF ADVANTAGES OF NEW SYSTEM PLEASE CLICK DOCUMENT [TEJJ CYCLE][1].
Copyediting - Queries[edit source]
Query 1: Appropedia's page naming conventions specify that only the first letter of the first word and proper nouns be capitalized. The resulting title should look like this, "Tin bicycle--The design contest motivation." The website doesn't have any specifications for headlines, but I think you should consider formatting those similarly for symmetry.
Query 2: The term "third world" can be considered derogatory by some. I noticed that you used "developing countries" and "poor countries" in this article also, and I think it would be a good idea to use one of those terms instead.
Query 3: Be sure to include a hyperlink or other reference for "Club of Rome report."
Query 4: I was a little confused by the phrase "system labor-life." Consider rewriting for clarity.