Initial Feedback[edit source]
Hi Team,
Nice start and good job including images. Some of your background should eventually move to a literature review section and be backed up with citations. Some of the background could be bolstered, e.g. referencing CCAT, Cal Poly Humboldt, your team, the semester, etc. Finally, the history of the greywater marsh before 2008 is not correct.
In addition, most of the design complications are due to the greywater effluent outlet from the house being so far below grade. There is a strong chance that you will need to do pumping to rectify that complication.
Thanks, --Lonny (talk) 15:50, 24 January 2017 (UTC)
Hello,
This is a good start but needs some editing. The first few paragraphs especially should be free of grammatical and spelling errors. This is the first impression your reader gets of you and you want it to be good. Please re-read your first few paragraphs out loud and check for errors or strange wording. Check to make sure you are maintaining professional language.
The first paragraph has a lot of information in it. I would ease the reader in with a bit more background, just a sentence or two of what CCAT is and what groundwater is.
Your order of topics seems a bit strange to me. I would recommend wring out your topics and subtopics on a piece of paper and what they cover and seeing what order makes the most sense.
Rebecca Stark (grader)
Criteria[edit source]
Hello Team, Your criteria is pretty good. Nothing can work till infinity, you need to talk to your client for a realistic time frame. Your constraints should also state whether more or less is better, for example for cost less is better.
Rebecca Stark (grader)
Optional Draft Feedback[edit source]
Hello, Team,
It looks like you are working hard and have a lot done. Read through your background, you have some repeats and confusing sentences. Try to condense your problem statement, it is a bit long. In general avoid saying "our" and use the instead, for example the project not our project. It helps it sound more professional by distancing yourselves. Check you Lit review to be sure every section has a source. Avoid your opinion in the lit review. For the design be sure to have pictures of every element, in general more pictures is better. The filling pictures are very small, try to make them larger. Finally don't forget to fill out the Team section. Keep working hard.
Rebecca Stark (grader)